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georginasand) wrote2010-07-19 09:54 pm
georginasand) wrote2010-07-19 09:54 pm
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Motivation
So I am posting an unfinished poem this week, fate conspired against me I guess. Big Tent's prompt for last week was about steganography--"security through obscurity." I got quickly discourage because, like last week, I felt like I was spending too much energy being clever to fulfill the prompt, than really writing poetry. So in the future, I am going to be more judicous about whether I use the prompt, or just write from another prompt source.
But I am proud of my idea, so I'll post what I do have
Motivation
(Italics are explanation, not poem) Since the idea was to encrypt code, or code-like, I took the idea of a way to pass messages in a military like situation. Step 1: write code in a 14 word (this is important) 17 syllable haiku:
If the eagle lands,
despair to the old falcon,
the dove will take flight.
So clearly if BAD THING (the eagle) happens, go to place already determined to be "the old falcon" (despair isn't that disimilar to dissapear--also the old falcon can be the place you go to despair BAD THING). Then partner in crime (code name dove) will take action. It's very 1950s-spy-the-eagle-has-landed, but oh well.
Step 2: Pick a 10 letter title--in this case Motivation. Now right a sonnet about that title.
But wait...because sonnets don't have enough rules--you must use one work from the haiku (in the order you want them read, ideally) in each line of the sonnet. Start the each line with the letter of the title that indicates the syllable the haiku word is (that's why ten letters)
Turns out this is hard, and can really cramp and artistic urges you might have. Seriously. Here's how far I got
Motivation
O! if [1 syllable] is to come to fruition
nest with motivation. When flies the
tender eagle of our ambition
it only lands again on branches free.
As with flame, dark brings despair; [ 3 syllables rhyming with lair]
Aspiration flees to the night, fatique
overtakes, [3 syllables] consumes, the lair.
If success you seek [1 syllable] the oldest league,
only know this: fly not with the falcon
[10 syllables including the word the]
if is the [2 syllables] flash the dove doth shun
in favor of will which overcomes by
[1 syllable beginning with I] that [I syllable] for that takes our light.
[9 syllables beginning with N] flight.
Yep. Fail. I am not, for obvious reasons, posting at Big Tent, but you should check out the other awesome (and vastly more successful) creations.
I remain,
Georgie
But I am proud of my idea, so I'll post what I do have
Motivation
(Italics are explanation, not poem) Since the idea was to encrypt code, or code-like, I took the idea of a way to pass messages in a military like situation. Step 1: write code in a 14 word (this is important) 17 syllable haiku:
If the eagle lands,
despair to the old falcon,
the dove will take flight.
So clearly if BAD THING (the eagle) happens, go to place already determined to be "the old falcon" (despair isn't that disimilar to dissapear--also the old falcon can be the place you go to despair BAD THING). Then partner in crime (code name dove) will take action. It's very 1950s-spy-the-eagle-has-landed, but oh well.
Step 2: Pick a 10 letter title--in this case Motivation. Now right a sonnet about that title.
But wait...because sonnets don't have enough rules--you must use one work from the haiku (in the order you want them read, ideally) in each line of the sonnet. Start the each line with the letter of the title that indicates the syllable the haiku word is (that's why ten letters)
Turns out this is hard, and can really cramp and artistic urges you might have. Seriously. Here's how far I got
Motivation
O! if [1 syllable] is to come to fruition
nest with motivation. When flies the
tender eagle of our ambition
it only lands again on branches free.
As with flame, dark brings despair; [ 3 syllables rhyming with lair]
Aspiration flees to the night, fatique
overtakes, [3 syllables] consumes, the lair.
If success you seek [1 syllable] the oldest league,
only know this: fly not with the falcon
[10 syllables including the word the]
if is the [2 syllables] flash the dove doth shun
in favor of will which overcomes by
[1 syllable beginning with I] that [I syllable] for that takes our light.
[9 syllables beginning with N] flight.
Yep. Fail. I am not, for obvious reasons, posting at Big Tent, but you should check out the other awesome (and vastly more successful) creations.
I remain,
Georgie